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I am counting cars the same way
I count fishes in my sea.
But it is murky like suffocating drains
choking words I can't take back
a lonely side puddle on the road.

I don't look at the metal bodies
but the warm breathing ones
from rolled-down windows, carefree lollipop wrappers
bobbing mainstream music.

I count the drivers and passengers smiles
and theirs is more than the ones you give me.
I understand.
I guess your car and try to find it anyway.

Is it ferrari red?
Like a horse with electric hooves
thundering my loose earth
with ridge muscles
fearless mane hair?

Is it a monster truck?
Like an armoured hunchback
distrusting eyes
banged up front-gate grin?

I'm beginning to think whatever it is
it's black.
As your leather jacket that collects nightmare sweat
old tears
hands too young to belong to
Parkinson.
As your pencilled past that
colours both our lives.

Baby, I have washed-up nickels.
I'll take the bus.
Inspired by: C.M
For: C.M

Maybe I don't know you at all. I thought of this when I was sitting by the road, counting cars, waiting.
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Given 2011-05-21
I fell in love with the scattered and lovely imagery in Hitchhiker by ~pencil-pawn. The poem recreates the feel of flitting thoughts as one stares at passing cars. ( Featured by nycterent )
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summerkeziah Featured By Owner May 23, 2011  Student General Artist
*smiles*

Congrats Pau :D
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IAmTheClaw Featured By Owner May 21, 2011
"I believe you're going...my way?"

The imagery of this is crystal clear. Very nicely done. c:
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pencil-pawn Featured By Owner May 22, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
thank you. always the one to wish and wait :3
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MonkeysUndles Featured By Owner May 21, 2011  Student Writer
....wow.
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megstiel Featured By Owner May 21, 2011  Student General Artist
I've never really thought of hitchhiking like this. It's nice, has a bit of morbidity to it but is also very sweet and hopeful.
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pencil-pawn Featured By Owner May 21, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
ah yes, the very heart of an adolescence.
that is me o.0
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rockerbabe221 Featured By Owner May 21, 2011  Student Writer
cool.
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alffarr Featured By Owner May 21, 2011  Professional Interface Designer
Too great. I keep coming back to this.
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pencil-pawn Featured By Owner May 21, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
i feel honoured!! thanks love!
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dull-glitter Featured By Owner May 21, 2011  Student Writer
Lovely! I especially love the ending!
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